Redemption on the River - Very, Very Close

The manuscript of Redemption on the River now stands at version 12.5.  It has now been through two complete proof readings (by Red Adept Publishing) and I've been through it myself twice more since 12.0 was printed.  The current hard copy in my hands is 12.4.

The book's cover artist (Scarlet Rugers) just submitted a concept that I really like, and so the cover might be ready to go before too much longer.

I'm not going to make the date scheduled by the book's formatter (52 Novels), but I warned them that I was somewhat at the mercy of proofers and cover designers, and I believe they'll understand.

Right now, looking at my schedule, I really, truly believe that I'll return from my four day trip on the 30th with the book done-done-done.  What I mean by that is that the manuscript will be frozen, finished, as well as the book cover, and I'll forward the files to 52 Novels.  Then, depending on their turnaround time, it should be uploaded to Amazon, Apple, Barnes & Noble, etc, and released to sink or swim on its own merits.

12th and Final Draft Exists

I've been working hard on Redemption on the River and it's very, very close to being finished.

Laurie the Editor worked on the 10th draft.  As previously reported, it took a while to digest her detailed edits on the manuscript itself as well as her 75 page overall report.  I finally got my act together, sat down, and managed to produce the 11th draft.  Many deep breaths were taken.

When I looked at the 11th, overall I was very pleased.  The book was much, much improved.  However comma I was unhappy with chapters 1 and 2.  They were rather abrupt, choppy, and didn't sound like me.  I didn't like them.  Not a good thing.

So, after another period of rest, reflection, and recharging, I did another rewrite of RotR.  There were no significant changes to chapters 3-23, which I'm happy with, but I sat down with some new ideas and a clean sheet of paper for chapter 1, and wrote until it melded into the existing structure.  I'm pleased with the results, the flow is much better, and I believe it addresses and incorporates things that Laurie brought up in her edit of the 10th draft.

So, I'm nearly done.  The book, for the first time, feels finished.  I'm going through the 12th draft with a red pen and it's 99.4% simply proofreading now.

Last Big Rewrite Underway

Back in December I received Laurie's edit of Redemption on the River.  (Her services are not cheap, but are worth every penny.)  She had some nice things to say about RotR, complimented me on my overall authorial skills, and then went to great lengths in pointing out areas that need improvement.

Her edit encompassed everything from niggling little punctuation corrections to big picture, this-doesn't-quite-work observations.  I concurred with 85% of what she said, and over the course of the past few months have corresponded with her to ask follow-up questions, request clarification of some points, and run new ideas past her.

It has taken quite a while to wrap my head around everything, make major decisions about how to proceed, and regain my motivation to sit down and power through another rewrite.  My motivation is back, however, and I'm becoming increasingly jealous of time not spent on the novel.

Some of the changes are tough, though, and although nothing is really set in stone it sometimes feels like it after ten drafts.  At least one minor character is going away, others are changing, and some scenes are being outright deleted.  The most startling effect so far is that the protagonist, Silas, someone I thought I knew through and through, is changing too.

 His change is subtle, not big, and it's because of some little changes in the beginning.  It's like the initial placement of the starting dominos have been adjusted slightly, and as a result they fall in different patterns, and the differences get bigger the further from the start they fall.

Interesting stuff.

Book Review - Empire of the Summer Moon

     A fascinating historical account of  the brief southern plains empire of the Comanche Indians, which dated from their mastery of the newly arrived horse to their final defeat by the US Army.  Their superb horsemanship and cavalry skills enabled them to conquer and hold the biggest, choicest portion of the southern buffalo range against rival Indian nations, then beat back successive waves of invaders in the form of Spaniards, Mexicans, and Texans.  They then largely held off the Americans for approximately thirty years before succumbing.  The final chapters revolve around Quanah Parker, the son of famous white captive Cynthia Ann Parker, who was a renowned young war chief among the last Comanche holdout bands, before he adopted many of the white man's ways while looking out for Comanche interests.

      Highly recommended.

Book Review - The Bullpen Gospels

Career minor league pitcher Dirk Hayhurst chronicles another minor league season with a mixture of humor, insight, hope, and near despair.  From beginning the season on the floor of his grandmother’s house to the last game many, many bus trips later, he gives an indelible account of players, coaches, and fans in the bush leagues.

Hayhurst doesn’t go too deeply into baseball minutia but spends much more time on the human stories around him, including his own troubled family.  The Bullpen Gospels is highly recommended.

Long Time No Blog

Yes, despite the best of my varying intentions it has been LTNB.  There are a number of reasons for that, but the biggest is that my editor returned her critique of Redemption on the River.

No, it's not that bad.

In fact, Laurie had many good things to say about my writing and the novel, and she's not one to mince words.  Also, I agree with 85% of her inputs.  The other 15% may simply fall under the headings of differences of opinion and author's pivilege.


Furthermore, for the small and medium-sized problems she pointed out I can immediately see what to do about them.  I'll be reading her report, see & agree with what she points out about, say, a particular scene, and I'll think, "Yes, your right, and I know just how to fix it!"

However, COMMA, she has pointed out two big things that should be fixed and I have been unable to come up with fixes.

As I said in correspondence with her, in order to fix them I run into the principle of Grandfather's Axe, which poses a question.  If I say I have my grandfather's axe, and that my father replaced the handle and I replaced the head, do I in fact have my grandfather's axe?  I say no.

So, whatever type of change that I come up with or has been suggested to fix the Two Big Problems (TBP's), it always feels like Grandfather's Axe.  Major changes are contemplated, and the result—in my mind—is that it becomes another book, not Redemption on the River.  I might as well just change the character names, but RotR on the back shelf, and start a new story.

What to do?

Book Review: The GunDigest Book of the Revolver

The GunDigest Book of the Revolver is a fine book and should be a valuable resource to anyone interested researching, shooting, and carrying a modern double action revolver.  That said, I will list my quibbles, which almost all have to do with what strikes me as a somewhat misleading title.

With a title like ‘Book of the Revolver’, I was expecting a thorough treatise on the revolver, including its history from the very earliest models through current iterations.  I looked forward to a learned exposition on, for example, such things as the Colt Paterson, cap & ball conversions, the Smith & Wesson Schofield, 20th Century refinements and improvements, and such oddities as the Webley-Fosbury semi-automatic revolver.  Nope.  The book ignores all that and instead concentrates on modern, currently produced double action revolvers, and virtually ignores the single actions.

Setting aside my mistaken expectations, the book is an excellent resource for anyone deciding between a revolver and semi-automatic handgun.  Once the decision to go with a revolver is made, the author very clearly and intelligently discusses many aspects of shooting, carrying, maintaining, and customizing the weapon.  Mr. Cunningham clearly states his own personal preferences and why, but also presents alternative views on such things as sight picture, types of grips, etc.  Also, the book has many black and white photos that clearly illustrate the points made.

All in all, once the book’s focus is understood, the GunDigest Book of the [Modern Double Action] Revolver is highly recommended for anyone who wishes to thoroughly understand the weapon.