First Page Contest & Critiques

I entered the first page of my novel in Nathan Bransford's Surprisingly Essential First Page Contest.  The contest has ballooned to over 400 entries as of this writing, and there is a bit of controversy over other bloggers critiquing entries to Nathan's contest on their own blogs.  Nathan has attempted a compromise by asking that people refrain from critiquing entries unless folks specifically give their okay to do so.

I gave my okay, and this post is to invite anyone who has migrated over here with feedback on my entry to critique away - I very much want as much input as I can get.  

Nathan Bransford's blog is here and also in my sidebar of links.